When I learned that the National Day on Writing, the National Park Service, and the National Writing Project would join forces to celebrate writing through #writeout in October, I was all in. #writeout is meant to help writers focus on stories of place…particularly if there is a national park nearby. I don’t happen to live near a national park, but I do live by spectacular outdoor spaces where I spend lots of time walking…and that inspire my writing.
As October began, students read and studied the poem, City I Love by Lee Bennett Hopkins. The rhythms and patterns of the poem were friendly to students, they were able to notice many techniques Hopkins employed. And better yet, they were eager and ready to write their own versions using this poem as their mentor text.
City I Love by Lee Bennett Hopkins
In the city
I live in—
city I love—
mornings wake
to swishes, swashes,
sputters
of sweepers
swooshing litter
from gutters.
In the city
I live in—
city I love—
afternoons pulse
with people hurrying,
scurrying—
races of faces
pacing to
must-get-there
places.
In the city
I live in—
city I love—
nights shimmer
with lights
competing
with stars
above
unknown heights.
In the city
I live in—
city I love—
as dreams
start to creep
my city
of senses
lulls
me
to
sleep.
With this poem as a mentor text, I wrote my own version, focusing on a favorite place of mine. Of course, I had to write about walking on the beach!
Beach I Love
At the beach
I walk on
The beach I love
Seagulls hover
Squawking and flapping
Searching for treats
In unattended
Beach bags.
At the beach
I walk on
The beach I love
Salty waves
Curl and break
Tossing swimmers
And tempting surfers
Into the cool, refreshing
Depths.
At the beach
I walk on
The beach I love
Squishy sand
Sucks at my toes
Tiny grains sanding
My soles smooth
And sheltering
Tiny frisky crabs and
Multitudes of bean clams.
At the beach
I walk on
The beach I love
Rhythmic seas
Slow my breath
Warm my heart
And clear my mind.
Kim Douillard
So in honor of the National Day on Writing and #writeout, I let the outdoors inspire my writing. I will include my students’ writing in days to come!
Thank you for sharing a city poem as part of Write Out .. we hope more urban spaces and more urban writing gets shared, even as it may inspire us to look closely at other spaces (like your beach and pebbles)
Kevin
Thanks Kevin. I wanted to leave spaces and places wide open for my students…not everyone spends their time at the beach–even though it is close. And you will love this, those aren’t pebbles in the photo–they are bean clams! Thousands and thousands, each one about the size on my pinkie fingernail!
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